學測衝刺教學：101學年度北模 - 書信英文作文分享
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學年度第一次學測英文模擬考中，沉寂一陣子的書信作文體裁又重出江湖，殺得許多同學措手不及。今天就以101 台北學測模擬考作文「園遊會」為題，讓同學了解基本的書信格式，也和大家分享「學測衝刺」成功高中 黃同學 迸發的活動創意 : D
提示：從小到高中，大家都有參加園遊會的經驗。請寫一封邀請函，請你的親朋好友來參加學校園遊會。第一段說明園遊會的時間和主題，你將要賣什麼產(食)品或辦什麼活動，同時說明其特色。第二段說明如何抵達會場及園遊會所得用途。請注意：信頭稱謂請用 Dear All，信末署名需用 John 或 Jane。
初稿：老師於課堂上講解寫作方向，提示詞彙片語後，請同學於週間完成初稿，並寄至學測衝刺教學指定信箱。
Dear
All, （註：書信作文開頭，人名稱呼後要打「逗號」）
This
year, our school fair is decided to be hold on 10/30.
It will be opened at 4:00 p.m. and finish approximately at 9:30 p.m.. Different
from the past event which
just sold some snacks and played some boring games（註：關代 which 代替前面的名詞 past event，event 不會
sold / played，文法錯誤，建議刪除這節。）, this
time, our subject is
"Brave." （註：活動主題 theme，非 subject (學科
/ 話題 / 受測者)。）The
event features 3 parts. First, in the entrance is the ghost house. Every guest has to get through
the ten-minute-long dim tunnel, and along the way, there are plenty of
"surprises" waiting for you. （註：這是一般大家想像的鬼屋，文法上都正確，但就是缺了亮點，可多加點創意。）In addition,
as soon as you pass the tunnel, several peddlers exhibit in front of you, and
they are all in Halloween styles. （註：將 exhibit (展示) 改成
show up / appear (出現)。要仔細描寫小販所販售的食物，食物也應扣緊 Halloween / 恐怖片這主軸。）Beside
the food and drink, we also have many club performance like guitar, drama,
magic, and honor guard. （註：Beside (= next to) 要換成 Besides (除…以外) 。many 後方的
performances 應為複數。表演節目和內容還是要扣緊 horror 這主軸。）Moreover,
there will be a horrible movie （註：horrible (adj.) 可怕的。應換成 horrible movie）playing
in the auditorium at 7:00. If you want to challenge your bravery,
just come! （註：換成 test your mental limitation 更好）
And
how to go to our school? （註：how to…這句非完整句子，應避免在作文中出現。）The
most convenient way is that
taking he MRT to the Shandao Temple station and go out from exit 5. （註：關代 that 後方要加完整句子，要有完整動作，taking 需改成 take。又或去掉
that，改成 taking…and going…。）Once
you leave the station, go straight for about 100 meters and on your left hand
side is our school. Apart from taking the MRT, you can also take bus 208, 262,
304, which directly reach there. By the way, our school fair ticket cost 300
dollars. It is mean that you won’t spend any money while entering the place. （註：ticket 應該搭 costs。is
/ mean 雙動詞，文法錯誤。實際上參加者花了 300 元買入場券，而不是不花一毛錢入場。反而應說明入場券可抵園遊會中的哪些項目。）All
our profits will donate to
ICRC. （註：profits 應搭配被動式 be donated。）You
will not only attend a sensational celebration but also make charities. （註：中式英文，應改成 make charitable contributions。）Don’t you want to experience a different and interesting Halloween? Don’t hesitate. We all welcome you to come.
Sincerely,
John
（註：信尾署名 (John) 和敬語 (Sincerely) 不在同一行。Sincerely 後方需打逗號。）
二修：下周上課，老師領著同學一起完成細部調整，調整方向涵蓋用字/ 文法/ 句型/ 文章結構/ 劇情邏輯等等，二修即最終定稿。定稿後，學生接著背誦自己的文章，將單字句構進一步內化。
Dear
All,
This
year, we will hold a fair to celebrate our school’s 80th
anniversary and Halloween. And we would like to invite you, along with your
family and friends, to join us on Oct. 30th, from 4 pm to 9:30 pm. We promise
to have something for everyone, so get ready to have great fun. Different from
the past celebrations, this time, we make “bravery” the main event theme. For those of you who love some thrills and
chills, you can sign up for the “haunted house.” Unlike the typical 5-minute walkthrough maze with sickly corpses
jumping out at you, our “Gates of Hell” is created by hardcore terror fanatics and employs movie-quality
props and special effects. The house features various horror elements that get
inside your head in ways too horrible to describe. For example, you might be
unexpectedly stuffed into a coffin or trapped in scary illusions such as being
attacked by something invisible and then left soaked in your own blood. In
addition, if you are more a food lover than thrill-seekers, there are 100
stalls offering a great variety of “spooky,” mind-blowing delicacies inspired by well-known horror movies. Among
the snacks is green slime popcorn. Rumor has it that if you eat a whole bowl in
front of the mirror in a dark room and say Bloody Murray three times, the
busters will appear. Besides, if you are willing to venture to a vampire diet,
you can sample those blood orange pops to see how Cullens in the movie Twilight
quench their blood cravings. Another highlight of this fair is an afternoon
live concert, which boasts student artists singing the creepy theme songs of
classic horror movies or put on shows adapted from popular thrillers. Moreover,
there will be a horror movie playing in the auditorium at 7:00. If you want to
test your mental limitation, just come!
As
for the transportation, the most convenient way to get to our campus is to take
the MRT to the Shandao Temple station and get out at exit 5. Once you leave the
station, go straight for about 100 meters, and on your left-hand side is our
school. Apart from taking the MRT, you can also take bus 208, 262, 304 and get
off right in front of the school gate. The admission fee is $300 per person and
it includes unlimited access to the haunted house, the concert, shows, and
exhibitions. All our profits will be donated to the charities including the
ICRC. This means that by attending this sensational celebration, you are also
making a big difference to the lives of those in need. Above all, don’t you want to experience Halloween in different ways? Don’t hesitate! The tickets are expected to sell out soon so you had
better sign up now.
Sincerely,
John
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